IELTS Writing Academic Checker - Sample Band 7
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The response effectively describes the trends and data from the bar chart, using a range of vocabulary and grammatical structures. However, there are minor inaccuracies in data interpretation, and the logical flow could be slightly improved for better coherence.
| Overall score | 7.0 | |
| Grammatical range and accuracy | 8.0 | |
| Lexical resource | 7.0 | |
| Coherence & cohesion | 8.0 | |
| Task response | 4.0 |
| Total Errors | 11 | |
| Grammatical range and accuracy | 1 | |
| Lexical resource | 4 | |
| Coherence & cohesion | 3 | |
| Task response | 3 |
Question
The bar chart depicts the number of overnight stays by international tourists in different regions of Australia (Queensland, New South Wales, Victoria, and Western Australia) from 2013 to 2017.
Explain the trends in overnight stays by international tourists for each region.
Identify which region had the highest number of overnight stays.
Discuss any significant changes or notable patterns in the data.
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**IELTS Writing Task 1: Band 8 Sample Answer**
The bar chart illustrates the number of
overnight
stays by international tourists in four regions of Australia—Queensland, New South Wales, Victoria, and Western Australia—over a five-year period from 2013 to 2017.Overall, New South Wales consistently recorded the highest number of
overnight
stays throughout the period, while Western Australia had the lowest figures. There were notable upward trends in most regions, with Victoria showing the most significant growth.In 2013, New South Wales led with approximately 15 million
overnight
stays, followed by Queensland with 12 million. Victoria recorded just over 9 million, while Western Australia had the fewest, with around 6 million. Over the next four years, New South Wales maintained its dominant position, experiencing a gradual increase to just over 17 million by 2017. Queensland showed a moderate rise, reaching about 14 million in 2017.Victoria demonstrated the most remarkable growth, increasing steadily from 9 million in 2013 to 13 million in 2017, nearly closing the gap with Queensland. In contrast, Western Australia exhibited a relatively flat trend, fluctuating slightly around the 6 to 7 million mark throughout the period.
A key observation is the growing popularity of Victoria, which experienced a nearly 50% increase in
overnight
stays over the five years. Meanwhile, New South Wales not only remained the most visited region but also displayed
consistent growth, underscoring its enduring appeal. Western Australia, however, lagged behind
, indicating limited growth compared to the other regions.